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What those kids are doing

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This report derives from a bar chart which illustrates the preferred leisure activities of Australian children aged 5-14. A general observation illustrates that the most preferred activity by both boys and girls is watching Television and videos, on the other hand, the least activities boys and girls do in their free time is skateboarding or rollerblading. A specific analysis reveals that, Of the 100 children that were interviewed, all the boys and girls stated that that enjoy watching TV or videos in their mobile phone in their free time. In addition, the second most preferred activity by both boys and girls attracting 60% and 80% of boys and girls was playing electronics and computer games. in their spare time. Meanwhile, bike riding was the 3rd most preferred activity by 65% of boys and 55% of girls. Notably, Only 35% of the boys showed interest In creative art and crafting things but girls showed slightly more interest than the boys by 30%. Besides this point, although skateboarding was relatively less popular among all the activities yet attracted about 35% of boys and 25% of girls. On a final note, most boys and girls love watching TV but are least interested in any kind of physical activity such as skateboarding and other exercises.
This report derives from a bar chart which illustrates the
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leisure
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activities
of Australian children aged 5-14.

A general observation illustrates that the most
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preferred
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activity
by both
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boys
and
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girls
is watching Television and videos,
on the other hand
, the least
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activities
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boys
and
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do in their free time is skateboarding or rollerblading.

A specific analysis reveals that, Of the 100 children that
were interviewed
, all the
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boys
and
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girls
stated
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enjoy watching TV or videos in their mobile phone in their free time.
In addition
, the second most
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preferred
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by both
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and
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attracting 60% and 80% of
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boys
and
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was playing electronics and computer games.
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their spare time. Meanwhile, bike riding was the 3rd most
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by 65% of
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interest In creative art and crafting things
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girls
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showed
slightly
more interest than the
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by 30%.
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this point, although skateboarding was
relatively
less popular among all the
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activities
yet
attracted about 35% of
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and 25% of girls.

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love
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such as skateboarding and other exercises.
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IELTS academic What those kids are doing

Academic
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5 paragraphs
211 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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