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compare two graphs discriminations about studying

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the first graph shows that there is a gradual decrease in the study for career reasons with age. nearly 80% of students under 26 years study for their career. this percentage gradually declines by 20% every decade. only 40 % of 49 years old and 18% of those over 59 years old are studying for career reasons in late adulthood. conversely, the first graph also shows that studies stemming from interest increase with age. there only 40% of under 26 years old studying out of interest. the percentage increases slowly till the beginning of the fourth decade and increases dramatically in late adulthood. the nearly same number of 40 years old study for career and interest/ however 70% of over 49 years old study for interest in comparison to 18% studying for career reasons in that age group. the second graph shows that employer support is maximum for the under 26 years students. it drops rapidly to 32% up to the third decade of life and then increases in late adulthood up to about 44%. it is unclear whether employer support is only for career-focused study but the highest level is for those students who mainly study for a career purposes

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