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The given line graph represent the Utilisation of three transmits namely Magazines low fat and reduced spreads and butter from the year 1981 to 2007. The given data is calculated numbers or figures. From an overall perspective It is vividly seen that during the year of 1986 the Utilisation of butter transmission was at its peak While reaching to year 2007 It got decreased from 160 grams to near 50 grams whereas the Utilisation of transmission of low fat and reduced spreads was least at the year of 1996. Meticulously observing the line grap It is clear that consumption of butter spread was initially 141 grams in the year 1981 while reaching next year which was 1986 it got increased to 160 grams whereas, in 1991 it got decreased from 160 grams to 100 grams. After that in year 1996 it went upto 70 grams while in 2001 it consumption was nearly 60 grams whereas in 2007 it went really down to approximately 47 grams while observing the next line on the graph it can be seen that the Utilisation of Magazines Spread was firstly 90 grams in the year 1981 while 1986 it got decreased to 80 grams whereas, during the year 1991 to 1996 It remained same which was 100 grams. Further proving the same point of view it is apparent in year 2001 it got decreased to near 82 grams and in 2007 stepped down to 40 grams whereas the consumption or low fat and reduced spread transmission Got started in the year 1996 which was 10 grams approximately while in the year 2001 it increased 82 grams but while reaching to the year 2007 it got more decreased from 82 grams to 70 grams.
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Utilisation
of three transmits
namely
Magazines low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
and butter from the
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year
1981 to 2007. The
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given
data
is calculated
numbers or figures.

From an
overall
perspective It is
vividly
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seen
that during the
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year
of 1986 the
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Utilisation
of butter transmission was at its peak While reaching to
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year
2007 It
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got
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decreased
from 160
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grams
to near 50
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grams
whereas the
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Utilisation
of transmission of low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spreads
was least at the
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year
of 1996.

Meticulously
observing the line
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grap
It is
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clear
that consumption of butter
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spread
was
initially
141
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grams
in the
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year
1981 while reaching
next
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year
which was 1986 it
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got
increased to 160
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grams
whereas, in 1991 it
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got
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decreased
from 160
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grams
to 100
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grams
. After that in
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year
1996 it went
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upto
70
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grams
while in 2001
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it consumption
was
nearly
60
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grams
whereas in 2007 it went
really
down to approximately 47
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grams
while observing the
next
line on the graph it can be
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seen
that the
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Utilisation
of Magazines
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Spread
was
firstly
90
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grams
in the
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year
1981 while 1986 it
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got
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decreased
to 80
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grams
whereas, during the
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year
1991 to 1996 It remained same which was 100 grams.

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Further
proving the same point of view it is apparent in
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year
2001 it
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got
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decreased
to near 82
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grams
and in 2007 stepped down to 40
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grams
whereas the consumption or low
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fat
and
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reduced
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spread
transmission
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Got
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started
in the
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year
1996 which was 10
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grams
approximately while in the
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year
2001 it increased 82
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grams
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but
while reaching to the
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year
2007 it
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got
more
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decreased
from 82
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grams
to 70
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grams
.
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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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