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What is your life and schedule

What is your life and schedule ENJxR
I got up at 01. 30 PM because I fall asleep at 06. 00 AM. After I wake up, I went to see my mom because we plan to go to bank before it closed. Actually, we have planed to go to the bank since yesterday, unfortunately we miss this agenda. During I was walking to see my mom, I found that she was taking to her guests. I had been waiting for my mom around 30 mins. Then we went out from out home around 3. 00 pm. While we was heading to the bank, I just remembered that I forgot my ID card which is in my wallet. Then we turned the direction back and picked up it. We arrived the bank at 03. 15 PM. and went out around 03. 50 PM. During I was droving, she asked me about having lunch outside. Finally, I designed to go back to have it at home. After we had arrived, maids finished my lunch which is Stir-Fired-Bacon with Holy-Basil. It placed on table with ice-coffee. I had it in one go and backed to my bed room around 05. 00 PM. During I had been staying in my room, my sist nocked my door. She asked me to help her work. We spent around 4 hrs together and we went to have dinner around 9 PM. I returned to the room around 10 PM and finished my shower around 10. 30 PM. So, from now on, I am staring my IELTs to 6 AM. in the morning. In my opinion, I wasted my time in a few days. I must to revise my schedule.
I
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got
up at 01. 30 PM
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because
I fall asleep at 06. 00 AM. After I wake up, I
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went
to
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see
my mom
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because
we plan to go to
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bank
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before
it closed.

Actually, we have planed to go to the
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bank
since yesterday, unfortunately we miss this agenda.

During I was walking to
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see
my mom, I found that she was taking to her guests.

I had been waiting for my mom
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around
30
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mins
. Then we
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went
out from out home
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around
3. 00 pm. While we
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was
heading to the
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bank
, I
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just
remembered that I forgot my ID card which is in my wallet. Then we turned the direction back and picked up it. We arrived the
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bank
at 03. 15 PM. and
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went
out
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around
03. 50 PM. During I was
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droving
, she asked me about having lunch outside.
Finally
, I designed to go back to have it at home.

After we had arrived, maids finished my lunch which is Stir-Fired-Bacon with Holy-Basil. It placed on table with ice-coffee. I had it in one go and backed to my
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bed room
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around
05. 00 PM. During I had been staying in my room, my
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sist
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nocked
my door. She asked me to
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help
her work. We spent
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around
4 hrs
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together and
we
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went
to have dinner
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around
9 PM. I returned to the room
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around
10 PM and finished my shower
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around
10. 30 PM.

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So
, from
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now
on, I am staring my
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IELTs
to 6 AM. in the morning.

In my opinion, I wasted my time in a few days. I
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must to
revise my schedule.

IELTS academic What is your life and schedule

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
275 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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