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The line graph outlines the increase percent of population over one decade from 1940-2040 for the countries USA, Sweden and Japan. Broadly speaking, Japan’s population proportion has snowballed over the years to reach more that 5 times of the initial 5% in 1940. Similarly, Sweden follows the pattern from a slightly higher population compared to Japan and is predicted to reach an increase of 25% over the years. USA is demonstrated to have a high head start in the initial years whereas, is projected to stoop in the coming years for the age group 65 and above. Specifically, the fact that Japan’s population is projected to skyrocket in between the years 2030-2040 in contrast to the USA population declining in the same time frame is intriguing. Even through Sweden and Japan follow similar trend till the 2000s, the line graph grows apart approximately by 6-7% by the mid-2000s. 1980 depicts an enormous difference of Japan with less than 5% of old age persons compared to Sweden and USA reaching 3 times the population than Japan.
The line graph outlines the increase percent of
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over one decade from 1940-2040 for the countries USA, Sweden and Japan.

Broadly
speaking,
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Japan’s
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proportion has snowballed over the years to reach more that 5 times of the initial 5% in 1940.
Similarly
, Sweden follows the pattern from a
slightly
higher
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population
compared to
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Japan
and
is predicted
to reach an increase of 25% over the years. USA
is demonstrated
to have a high head
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start
in the initial years whereas,
is projected
to stoop in the coming years for the age group 65 and above.

Specifically
, the fact that
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Japan’s
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population
is projected
to skyrocket in between the years 2030-2040
in contrast
to the USA
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population
declining in the same time frame is intriguing. Even through Sweden and
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Japan
follow similar trend till the 2000s, the line graph grows apart approximately by 6-7% by the mid-2000s. 1980 depicts an enormous difference of
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Japan
with less than 5% of
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old
age persons compared to Sweden and USA reaching 3 times the
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than
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Japan
.
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IELTS academic population of USA, Sweden and Japan

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