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The charts presented depicts five sources of energy in France for a period of ten years. Overall, gas is the primary source of energy in the country, while other sources take a small percentage of the charts. During, the ten years gas, petro, and coal are the major sources of energy. Significantly, coal produces the most as compared with petro and coal in 1995 and 2005. Similarly, gas and petro remained constant to be the second and third distributor. However, nuclear energy had become slightly popular in France. A surprising increase of almost 4% was seen, in 1995 it only contributes at about 6. 40% to now at 10. 10%. The same goes with other sources, which had a two-fold increase in making energy. Within ten years, a dramatic decrease in demand for petro was observed. Petro lost almost 10% from its previous position of 29. 27% in 1995 to 19. 55% in 2005.
The charts presented depicts five
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in France for a period of ten years.
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, gas is the primary
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in the country, while other
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percentage of the charts.

During, the ten years gas,
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, and coal are the major
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Significantly
, coal produces the most as compared with
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petro
and coal in 1995 and 2005.
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, gas and
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remained constant to be the second and third distributor.

However
, nuclear
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energy
had become
slightly
popular in France. A surprising increase of almost 4% was
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seen
, in 1995 it
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contributes at about 6. 40% to
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now
at 10. 10%. The same goes with other
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, which had a two-fold increase in making
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. Within ten years, a dramatic decrease in demand for
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petro
was observed
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lost almost 10% from its previous position of 29. 27% in 1995 to 19. 55% in 2005.
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IELTS academic ? we are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely to much in computer?

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