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The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in European country from 1979 to 2004

The provided line graph elucidates how much intake of meat was required for Europeans; namely: chicken, beef, lamb and fish. A comparison has been made between various years from 1979 to 2004. While the data has been calibrated in grams per person per week. Overall, a quick glance at the chart reveals that the consumption of chicken was considering the highest among other three categories, whereas the least consumption of fish was preferred by Europeans. To embark upon, the consumption of chicken and lamb were started by around 150 grams per person per week respectively in the beginning of the study. After, in latter years both were showing opposite direction till 2004 and reaching 250 and around 55 grams successively. Moving on to the intake of beef, which begins with nearly 200 grams, it was fluctuating in further years showing downward trend accounted for nearly 120 grams per person. Last but not the lest, the intake of fish was showing a stability from 1979 to 2004 consist of 50 grams remained till the end of the study. It is worth noticing that, grams per person per week, the consumption of chicken was almost second last position at the beginning from around 150, but it rose dramatically fluctuating in pattern, while top the chart by double.

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