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water sources used for different sectors between 1997 and 2007

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The given pie charts compare the percentages of water consumption in five different purposes in the years 1997 and 2007. Overall, the proportions of consuming water in households and service industry witnessed a growth, creating corresponding drops of the other groups over the shown years. Additionally, service industry seemed to be used more prevalent, while building industry accounted for the least percentage. In 1997, 19% and 13% of total consumed water were gone to families and service industry, followed by increases to 21% and 25%, respectively in 2007. In contrast, there was a considerable drop to 41%, although, food industry still remained the highest proportions of all other purposes during the 10-years period. Regard to others, 5% was the percentage of water used in building-related activities, lower than three times than that in manufacturing, at 15%. The next 10 years experienced gradual decreases in the figure for both, by 3% for the former and 4% for the latter.
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pie charts compare the percentages of
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consumption in five
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different
purposes in the years 1997 and 2007.

Overall
, the proportions of consuming
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water
in households and service
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industry
witnessed a growth, creating corresponding drops of the other groups over the shown years.
Additionally
, service
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industry
seemed to be
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used
more prevalent, while building
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industry
accounted for the least percentage.

In 1997, 19% and 13% of total consumed
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water
were gone
to families and service
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industry
, followed by increases to 21% and 25%,
respectively
in 2007.
In contrast
, there was a considerable drop to 41%, although, food
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industry
still
remained the highest proportions of all other purposes during the 10-years period.

Regard to others, 5% was the percentage of
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water
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used
in building-related activities, lower than three times than that in manufacturing, at 15%. The
next
10 years experienced gradual decreases in the figure for both, by 3% for the former and 4% for the latter.
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IELTS academic water sources used for different sectors between 1997 and 2007

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4 paragraphs
158 words
6.5
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