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The City Hospital Map in 2008 and 2010

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These two figures illustrate a comparison between the city hospital maps in two different years. Although the ring road surrounding the hospital remained the same, there have been many changes in the layout of the parking lots for both the public and staff. First of all, they seprated the staff car park from the public, which was a good decision. I guess the new public car park makes drop-offs and pick-ups easier for the patients. As it shows, they have located a bus station near the city hospital. Therefore, the hospital is more accessible for the people who use public transportations. The new additional roundabouts on the north and south side of the bus station have made the roads even more convinient. Overall, they have considerably improved the access to the hospital in 2010.
These two figures illustrate a comparison between the city
hospital
maps in two
different
years. Although the ring road surrounding the
hospital
remained the same, there have been
many
changes
in the layout of the parking lots for both the
public
and staff.
First of all
, they
seprated
the staff car park from the
public
, which was a
good
decision. I guess the new
public
car park
makes
drop-offs and pick-ups easier for the patients. As it
shows
, they have located a bus station near the city
hospital
.
Therefore
, the
hospital
is more accessible for the
people
who
use
public
transportations. The new additional roundabouts on the north and south side of the bus station have made the roads even more
convinient
.
Overall
, they have
considerably
improved
the access to the
hospital
in 2010.
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IELTS academic The City Hospital Map in 2008 and 2010

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  American English
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