Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In addition, both brand sales have peaked with around 450 in the global market in different years with most users on a whole.

In addition, both brand sales have peaked with around 450 in the global market in different years with most users on a whole. DVpPa
The given bar chart illustrates the worldwide sales between 2009 and 2013 of five smartphone brands. This essay will highlight on main trends and record relevant comparisons. Overall, throughout the years Samsung phone sales has steadily risen while with a similar pace a modest drop has been evident in the sales of Nokia phone. To commence with, in 2011 LG and Apple has been seen with the same number of sales slightly below 100. Furthermore, Sales of Apple initiated at less than 50 and increased 50 in number every 2 years peaking at 150 in 2013. Secondly, Sales of Nokia sharply dropped 150 in number considering the span of 2 years between 2011 to 2013. In addition, Nokia and Samsung brand sales have peaked with around 450 in the global market in different years with most users on a whole. Lastly, no major growth was seen in ZTE phone sales with only slight fluctuations throughout the year.
The
given
bar chart illustrates the worldwide
sales
between 2009 and 2013 of five smartphone brands. This essay will highlight on main trends and record relevant comparisons.

Overall
, throughout the years Samsung phone
sales
has
steadily
risen while with a similar pace a modest drop has been evident in the
sales
of Nokia phone.

To commence with, in 2011 LG and Apple has been
seen
with the same number of
sales
slightly
below 100.
Furthermore
,
Sales
of Apple initiated at less than 50 and increased 50 in number every 2 years peaking at 150 in 2013.

Secondly
,
Sales
of Nokia
sharply
dropped 150 in number considering the span of 2 years
between 2011 to 2013
.
In addition
, Nokia and Samsung brand
sales
have peaked with around 450 in the global market in
different
years with most users on a whole.
Lastly
, no major growth was
seen
in
ZTE
phone
sales
with
only
slight fluctuations throughout the
year
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS academic In addition, both brand sales have peaked with around 450 in the global market in different years with most users on a whole.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts