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Unemployed rate in japan and us

Unemployed rate in japan and us 759En

The rendered line graph illustrates that how many percentage of people were jobless who line in the us and japan, from the year 1993 to 1999. Overall, it can be clearly seen from the chart that eventually unemployment rate was higher in us than japan. while, at the end of the period percentages of jobless people were almost same for both countries. In March 1993, US had 7% unemployed, in comparison with only 2. 5% in japan. Rate of unemployment diminished by 1% in us. In contrast the proportion of jobless people increased by almost 3% in japan in 1994. From 1996 to 1997, unemployed people's proportion remained steady, it was 5. 5% for us and around 4. 5% for japan. In march 1998, both countries unemployment rate was same accounted to approximately above the 5. 5% and after one year this proportion ebbed and it was under the 5. 5% in 1998.

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