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The table shows a survey of the proportion of adults in California by age group who enjoyed different types of leisure activities in 2011.

The table shows a survey of the proportion of adults in California by age group who enjoyed different types of leisure activities in 2011. xDEWg
The rendered diagram portrays the percentage of individuals in California categorized based on age, who found delight in various kinds of amusement pursuits in 2011. Overall, the highest percentage of pastime throughout the year was for television watching, closely followed by the time spent with acquaintances. Meanwhile, the portion of those who played on the computer was relatively low compared to the rest of the categories. Firstly the values plunged from 76% to 85% for the first two age sets observing TV. The change between the last two groups for this hobby was a slight increase of 3%. This is opposed to the family time, where there was a large decrease in the last two rows of 10%. On the other hand, both gathering with others and reading had a difference of 2% for ages between 18 to 30 to 31 to 45. Notably, 27% of under thirtees heard tunes, while only 7% gardened. This case is reversed at the last section, where people above 60 years old looked after their gardens more and only 2% of them enjoyed music. Moreover, although 15% of people who were from 18 to 30 years played on a device, no one did after turning 60.
The rendered diagram portrays the percentage of individuals in California categorized based on age, who found delight in various kinds of amusement pursuits in 2011.

Overall
, the highest percentage of pastime throughout the year was for television watching,
closely
followed by the time spent with acquaintances. Meanwhile, the portion of those who played on the computer was
relatively
low compared to the rest of the categories.

Firstly
the values plunged from 76% to 85% for the
first
two age sets observing TV. The
change
between the last two groups for this hobby was a slight increase of 3%. This
is opposed
to the family time, where there was a large decrease in the last two rows of 10%.
On the other hand
, both gathering with others and reading had a difference of 2% for ages
between 18 to 30
to 31 to 45.

Notably
, 27% of under
thirtees
heard tunes, while
only
7% gardened. This case
is reversed
at the last section, where
people
above 60 years
old
looked after their gardens more and
only
2% of them enjoyed music.
Moreover
, although 15% of
people
who were from 18 to 30 years played on a device, no one did after turning 60.
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