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the sales of tickets at Springfield cinema in weekends.

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Name- Thurein phyo Thant The given table compares the ticket sales at the Springfield Cinema on Saturday and tickets in Saturday night are the top sales. On Saturday, 100 tickets and 125 tickets were sold by 3: 00 p. m. and 5: 00 p. m. respectively. However, there were no differences the ticket sales between 7: 00 p. m. and 9: 00 p. m. , with 150 tickets were sold and the most. On the other hand, In Sunday night, even 125 tickets were sold, while only 100 tickets on Saturday by 3: 00 p. m. Then, 100 tickets and 75 tickets were sold by 5: 00 p. m. and 7: 00 p. m. respectively by the time 125 and 150 of tickets were sold on Saturday. Only a few tickets were sold, although the sales were strong in the Saturday late night (9: 00 p. m. ). To conclude, the sales of tickets on Saturday and Sunday were opposite. The darker the night, the stronger the sales on Saturday, but Sunday’s sales were not.
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are the top sales.

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, 100
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by 3: 00 p. m. Then, 100
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