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The line graph depict data on consumption variety fast foods such as hamburgers, pizza and fried Chicken among the teenagers in Mauritius over the 30 year period.

The line graph depict data on consumption variety fast foods such as hamburgers, pizza and fried Chicken among the teenagers in Mauritius over the 30 year period. VQ5bQ
The line graph depict data on consumption variety fast foods such as hamburgers, pizza and fried Chicken among the teenagers in Mauritius over the 30 year period. Overall, it clearly can be seen that, the amount of consuming of hamburgers and fried chicken have shown dramatic increase over the whole period, while the consumption of pizza decreased gradually of the given period. Feature 1 At the first glance, it is apparent from the information, at the start of period the number of consuming pizza was with 60 number per year and by 1995 the selling of pizza decreased slowly with 50 perfectly. In 2000 pizza continued decreasing their selling just under with 40. Following these 15 years period the number of consumption pizza went down to 10 number per year. Feature 2 At the start of the period, from 1995 to 2005 the number of consuming of hamburgers increased dramatically to 40 and went up to a peak over the whole period with 70 number of selling it was the highest index among other categories in given graph. Fried chicken reported their consuming near to just under 10 and started to increase their outcome in 1995 with just over 30 numbers. Between 2000 and 2005 there was increasing of selling their product with 60 and stayed stable to 2010 and rose slowly again in the end of period by reporting their number of selling with just over 60 and it was the slower index than hamburgers.
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60 and it was the slower index than hamburgers.
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IELTS academic The line graph depict data on consumption variety fast foods such as hamburgers, pizza and fried Chicken among the teenagers in Mauritius over the 30 year period.

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