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two maps demonstrate the manifestation of a precise island

two maps demonstrate the manifestation of a precise island 6LG9r
The given two maps demonstrate the manifestation of a precise island, before building a tripper facility and below that. Overall, the area of the island is the same on both of the 2 maps. Moreover, in the first map, we can readily discern the lacking of activities and services. on the other hand, the second map echoes more details about some renovations which makes the tourists' activity nowadays is better than the past. Glancing more closely at the first 100 meters in both of the maps from the left side, the old version of the map contains a beach, palms, and a large space area. However, the updated island encompasses the old beach with a new swimming feature. Furthermore, there are 2 circular accommodation buildings with 2-foot paths and they have been separated by a restaurant and a public reception, which is besieged by a vehicle track. This vehicle track is connected with the pier to help the tourists in reaching the small boats. Although all the new constructions are on the left side of the island, the right side is just containing some palms without any changes.
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demonstrate the manifestation of a precise
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island
,
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before
building a tripper facility and below that.

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, the area of the
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island
is the same on both of the 2
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maps
.
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, in the
first
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, we can
readily
discern the lacking of activities and services.
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on
the other hand, the second
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echoes more
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details
about
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some
renovations which
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the tourists' activity nowadays is better than the past.

Glancing more
closely
at the
first
100 meters in both of the
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maps
from the
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left
side, the
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old
version of the
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map
contains a beach, palms, and a large space area.
However
, the updated
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island
encompasses the
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old
beach with a new swimming feature.
Furthermore
, there are 2 circular accommodation buildings with 2-foot
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paths and
they have
been separated
by a restaurant and a public reception, which
is besieged
by a vehicle
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track
. This vehicle
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track
is connected
with the pier to
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help
the tourists in reaching the
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small
boats.

Although all the new constructions are on the
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left
side of the
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island
, the right side is
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just
containing
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some
palms without any
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changes
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IELTS academic two maps demonstrate the manifestation of a precise island

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  American English
4 paragraphs
188 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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