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Transport Used During Visit - Writing Task 1

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The given line graph illustrates the proportion transportation that the international tourists who pay a visit to New Zealand used their trip. Overall, Car was commonly used by tourists whereas travelling by boat was not favor to used widely on their tour. Looking at more details, Car was the first-ranked transportation facilities which the proportion accounted for nearly 70 percent of the in New Zealand. The figure for plane and coach was nearly the same at over 30% for each transportation. On the other hand, the number of vistors chose train for visiting was not common, just only took 20 percent in total. Similarly boat is by far the least popular choice, with only below 10 percent of international visitors.
The
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line graph illustrates the proportion transportation that the international tourists who pay a visit to New Zealand
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used
their trip.

Overall
, Car was
commonly
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used
by tourists whereas travelling by boat was not
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favor
to
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used
widely
on their tour.

Looking at more
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details
, Car was the
first
-ranked transportation facilities which the proportion accounted for
nearly
70 percent of the in New Zealand. The figure for
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plane
and coach was
nearly
the same at over 30% for each transportation.

On the other hand
, the number of
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vistors
chose train for visiting was not common,
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just
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only
took 20 percent in total.
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Similarly
boat is by far the least popular choice, with
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only
below 10 percent of international visitors.
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IELTS academic Transport Used During Visit - Writing Task 1

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
120 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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