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The given bar chart illustrates the volume of books hired every month in Malton Town Library in 2009.

The given bar chart illustrates the volume of books hired every month in Malton Town Library in 2009. Lbpy1
The given bar chart illustrates the volume of books hired every month in Malton Town Library in 2009. The initial impression from the chart is that the tally of books rented witnessed an erratic through the whole period. It is also clear that December has the highest number of books rented, while February displayed an opposite pattern. As can be seen from the chart, the figure for the volume of books rented in Malton Town Library, in the meantime, despite dropping from 10 to 6 books in January and February, respectively, then this figure climbed steadily to 15 books in May. Looking at details, having fluctuated from May to July, the number of books rented rocked to 21 books in August, before plummeting to 12 books in September. The volume of books hired in December experienced a peak at 21 books, which meant it is on the top of the list.
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Malton
Town Library in 2009.

The initial impression from the chart is that the tally of
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books
rented witnessed an erratic through the whole period. It is
also
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clear
that December has the highest number of
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books
rented, while February displayed an opposite pattern.

As can be
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seen
from the chart, the figure for the volume of
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rented in
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Malton
Town Library, in the meantime, despite dropping from 10 to 6
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books
in January and February,
respectively
, then this figure climbed
steadily
to 15
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books
in May.

Looking at
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details
, having fluctuated from May to July, the number of
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rented rocked to 21
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in August,
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before
plummeting to 12
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books
in September. The volume of
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hired in December experienced a peak at 21
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books
, which meant it is on the top of the list.
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