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Topic The diagram below shows the process of collecting rain water for use as drinking water in an Australian town v.2

Topic The diagram below shows the process of collecting rain water for use as drinking water in an Australian town v. 2
The picture illustrates the procedure of converting rain water into usable household water in a city located in Australia. In overall, there are five main steps, in which water undergoes two different processes: physical and chemical. In the first step, rain water is collected from the roof in a rainy day before being drained into a tank filled with pebbles to experience the first physical treatment. Those small stones will act as an absorbance factor, thus eliminating a huge amount of dust in raw water. After some times of being filtered, preliminary water is transferred into a reservoir in the third step to prepare for the second treatment, the chemical one. In the fourth stage, water is treated with some dedicated chemical substances to complete its treatment process. The water is then ready to put into use through a system of separate water pipes that supply drinking water to each household in town.
The picture illustrates the procedure of converting rain
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water
into usable household
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water
in a city located in Australia. In
overall
, there are five main steps, in which
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water
undergoes two
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different
processes: physical and chemical.

In the
first
step, rain
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water
is collected
from the roof in a rainy day
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before
being drained
into a tank filled with pebbles to experience the
first
physical treatment. Those
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small
stones will act as an absorbance factor,
thus
eliminating a huge amount of dust in raw
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water
. After
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some
times of
being filtered
, preliminary
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water
is transferred
into a reservoir in the third step to prepare for the second treatment, the chemical one.

In the fourth stage,
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water
is treated
with
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some
dedicated chemical substances to complete its treatment process. The
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water
is then ready to put into
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use
through a system of separate
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water
pipes that supply drinking
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water
to each household in town.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS academic Topic The diagram below shows the process of collecting rain water for use as drinking water in an Australian town v. 2

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
153 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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