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Today more people than ever are traveling around the world. Some people believe that such traveling helps to broaden’s minds, while others think it just confirms their prejudices. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Today more people than ever are traveling around the world. Some people believe that such traveling helps to broaden’s minds, while others think it just confirms their prejudices. 1bjeA

Traveling around the world today are more common than in the past. When people live in a country is developing everyday, they have a lot of thoughts that they should have more knowledge about the world or they just want to show off that they are rich enough to travel around the world. This graph I will tell you about both views. First, it is obvious that when we go out, we can enrich our knowledge so much. We can learn and absorb what we think is difficult and new that we have never heard before. In different countries, people have different thoughts and ways of life so we can easily change the way we thought and always have positive thinking. Moreover, we can import cultures suitable for our country to develop the country in all aspects. On the other hand, others think that traveling is just to show that they are rich. They have lots of opportunities to go everywhere they like but they don’t know how to take advantage of these chances to enhance themselves. Therefore, it is wrong thoughts that makes people gradually lose their ability to absorb and think. It may have bad effects on themselves and their coutries, especially while the country is in the process of industrialization and modernization. In my view, all people can travel to everywhere they like and do everything they want, they don’t need to put too much emphasis on learning and expanding their knowledge. However, they shouldn’t pretend to be arrogant, bragging because they are able to go to many places and experience a lot of new things that not everyone has. It will be very helpful if we can properly apply foreign developments at our country. On the whole, traveling is the best way for us to discover new things and relax after some pressures. Different people may have different thoughts about traveling and the way we broaden their minds. It would be better if everyone used their abilities rationally and usefully.

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