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It is often contributed that children should always obey to advise which is given by parents.

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It is often contributed that children should always obey to advise which is given by parents. To a certain extent I agree, that advice from the old generation is beneficial for youngsters, while I also believe that in some reasons parental advice can totally change their direction. On the one hand, we should follow guardians' advice because it is useful for children. Parents have knowledge and awareness about life, as they went through this age, and they could be the best assistant of the kids, which only recently came into the world. Also, obeying to the parents' advice can play a significant role in achieving success. For instance, it is common to see that, children who followed their guardians' council were more successful in their life. That's why it is better to obey some of their advice. On other hand, some advice can misdirect children. Nowadays, adolescents are more intelligent and diligent than the older generation and are able to identify what would be beneficial and correct for them. For example, when teenagers try to select their future university or career. In my country, some people still force becoming a doctor or lawyer for their sons and daughters despite some of them having potential as a celebrity, sportsman or programmer. In other words, parents should not instil their children to pick something, that they want to do and be. To summarize, I agree that on special occasions advice could be life-saving, but it should be without enforcement
It is
often
contributed that
children
should always obey to advise which is
given
by parents. To a certain extent I
agree
, that
advice
from the
old
generation is beneficial for youngsters, while I
also
believe that in
some
reasons parental
advice
can
totally
change
their direction.

On the one hand, we should follow guardians'
advice
because
it is useful for
children
. Parents have knowledge and awareness about life, as they went through this age, and they could be the best assistant of the kids, which
only
recently came into the world.
Also
, obeying to the parents'
advice
can play a significant role in achieving success.
For instance
, it is common to
see
that,
children
who followed their guardians' council were more successful in their life. That's why it is better to obey
some
of their advice.

On other hand,
some
advice
can misdirect
children
. Nowadays, adolescents are more intelligent and diligent than the older generation and are able to identify what would be beneficial and correct for them.
For example
, when
teenagers
try to select their future university or career. In my country,
some
people
still
force becoming a doctor or lawyer for their sons and daughters despite
some
of them having potential as a celebrity, sportsman or programmer.
In other words
, parents should not
instil
their
children
to pick something, that they want to do and be.

To summarize
, I
agree
that on special occasions
advice
could be life-saving,
but
it should be without enforcement
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IELTS academic It is often contributed that children should always obey to advise which is given by parents.

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246 words
6.5
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