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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. v.2

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. v. 2
The graph represents the amount of carbon dioxide emissions have been released throughout four European countries, namely; the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. The units are measured in metric tonnes. Overall, the carbon dioxide emissions reduced in the UK and Sweden whereas Italy and Portugal showed an incremental trend. In 1967, the carbon dioxide emissions was the highest for the UK of around 11 metric tonnes, followed by Sweden of about 9 metric tonnes and Italy and Portugal had 4 and 1 metric tonnes respectively. By 1987, the UK decreased constantly to reach at 10 metric tonnes, while the Sweden’s carbon dioxide had a periodic fluctuation of 11 metric tonnes in 1977 before plummeted to about 7 metric tonnes which were the same amount of carbon dioxide emission figure for Italy in 1987. Portugal rose with its carbon dioxide emission release to 3 metric tonnes in the same period. From 1987 to 2007, all countries’ carbon dioxide emission had the same trend. While the UK and Sweden continued with its decreasing trend, Italy and Portugal had the same incremental trends. By 2007, the UK had around 9 metric tonnes of carbon dioxide emissions whereas Sweden’s carbon dioxide declined constantly to 5 metric tonnes which were the same figure as for Portugal’s carbon dioxide emissions. Concurrently, the carbon dioxide emissions of Italy remained unchanged at close to 8 metric tonnes for a last decade.
The graph represents the amount of
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; the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. The units
are measured
in metric tonnes.

Overall
, the
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in the UK and Sweden whereas Italy and Portugal
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an incremental trend.

In 1967, the
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dioxide
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was the highest for the UK of around 11 metric tonnes, followed by Sweden of about 9 metric tonnes and Italy and Portugal had 4 and 1 metric tonnes
respectively
. By 1987, the UK decreased
constantly
to reach at 10 metric tonnes, while the Sweden’s
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dioxide had a periodic fluctuation of 11 metric tonnes in 1977
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plummeted to about 7 metric tonnes which were the same amount of
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dioxide
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figure for Italy in 1987. Portugal rose with its
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release to 3 metric tonnes in the same period.

From 1987 to 2007, all countries’
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dioxide
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had the same trend. While the UK and Sweden continued with its decreasing trend, Italy and Portugal had the same incremental trends. By 2007, the UK had around 9 metric tonnes of
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carbon
dioxide
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emissions
whereas Sweden’s
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dioxide declined
constantly
to 5 metric tonnes which were the same figure as for Portugal’s
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dioxide
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emissions
.
Concurrently
, the
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of Italy remained unchanged at close to 8 metric tonnes for a last decade.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. v. 2

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