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This chart represents the percentage of British people that have given money to charity, classified by age, throughout the years of 1990 and 2010.

This chart represents the percentage of British people that have given money to charity, classified by age, throughout the years of 1990 and 2010. k65An
This chart represents the percentage of British people that have given money to charity, classified by age, throughout the years of 1990 and 2010. The bar graph reached its highest peak in 1990 with the age range of 36-50, representing an approximate of 42%, on the other hand the lowest point was in 2010 with the age range of 18-25, representing an approximate of 6%; nevertheless people were always willing to help charity. We can observe how the year of 1990 has the biggest percentage of British people that have given money to charity, however in 2010 the last 2 age ranges turned the graph acquiring a higher percentage. Within the age range of 65 onwards, the citizens that helped charity were in the closest percentage as there only was a difference of 3%. To summarize, there were upward and downward trends that are not that noticeable and we can conclude that British people from 18 to 25 gave less money to charity while the age range of 35-50 were the main donors to charity.
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money to
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, classified by
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, throughout the years of 1990 and 2010.

The bar graph reached its highest peak in 1990 with the
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range
of 36-50, representing
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of 18-25, representing
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We can observe how the year of 1990 has the biggest
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in 2010 the last 2
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turned the graph acquiring a higher
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age
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of 65 onwards, the citizens that
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helped
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were in the closest
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as there
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was a difference of 3%.

To summarize
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we can conclude that British
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from 18 to 25 gave less money to
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while the
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age
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of 35-50 were the main donors to
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