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comparison about which people donated more money to charity between 1990 and 2010 if youth and adult British citizens?

comparison about which people donated more money to charity between 1990 and 2010 if youth and adult British citizens? 1a1RG

In this graph analysis we can see a comparison about which people donated more money to charity between 1990 and 2010 if youth and adult British citizens? In 1990 adults from 36 to 50 years old were the ones who donated the most while we can see that in 2010 there was an increase in the area of adults between 51 and 65 years who contributed so much more than the youth ones. In 1990 and 2010 youth people between 18 and 25 years old were the ones who did not participate that much. But we can also see that in 2010 the chart was similar as in 1990 were almost 40 percent of people donated to the charity. With this graph we can see that in 1990 people between 26 to 50 years contributed the most and in 2010 adults from 51 to 65 gave the most. In 2010 many people could not participate as it was in 1990 where the economy was different and people did not struggle getting a job.

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see
 a comparison about which You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 donated more money to charity between 1990 and 2010 if youth and adult British citizens?

In 1990 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpersonwomanman
adults
 from 36 to 50 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 were the ones who donated the most while we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
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 that in 2010 there was an increase in the area of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpersonwomanman
adults
 between 51 and 65 years who contributed This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
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 much more than the youth ones.

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In
 1990 and 2010 youth You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 between 18 and 25 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 were the ones who did not participate that much. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
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This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that in 2010 the chart was similar as in 1990 were almost 40 percent of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 donated to the charity. With this graph we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 that in 1990 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
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between 26 to 50
 years contributed the most and in 2010 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpersonwomanman
adults
 from 51 to 65 gave the most. In 2010 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 could not participate as it was in 1990 where the economy was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 did not struggle If 'struggle' is used as a verb, it usually requires the infinitive: "to get".to get
getting
 a job. 