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This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for three countries. There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005.

This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for three countries. There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005. YLdm5
The bar graph exhibits the effects of on-the-job injuries on the number of days lost per worker in five countries; namely, America, Brazil, China, Germany and Korea for the following time periods: 1991-1995, 1996-2000 and 2001-2005. First, China showed the highest number of days lost due to work-related injuries in the three-time periods. They recorded a sky-high record at 10 lost days from 2001-2005, the highest among all the countries compared. Next on the highest tally of the number of days lost, was the country of Brazil which recorded an average number of lost days of around 6-7 days for the three-time periods. In contrast, we can see the country of Germany to be the most efficient country in reducing work-related injuries. The country has seen a declining trend for the periods covered with its lowest level recorded in 2001-2005 at 2 days. However, this is not a similar case for the country of America and Korea which saw an upward trend, still, they maintained their highest recorded number of days lost to the median range of 5 days. Overall, we can assume that highly developed countries are more effective in combatting work-related injuries thereby efficiently reducing the number of days lost due to it. Meanwhile, developing countries like Brazil and China, still need to forcefully improve their safety standards at work.
The bar graph exhibits the effects of on-the-job
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injuries
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lost
per worker in five
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countries
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, America, Brazil, China, Germany and Korea for the following time periods: 1991-1995, 1996-2000 and 2001-2005.

First
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the highest
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number
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lost
due to work-related
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injuries
in the three-time periods. They
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recorded
a sky-high record at 10
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lost
days from 2001-2005, the highest among all the
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countries
compared.
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on the highest tally of the
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number
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lost
, was the
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country
of Brazil which
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recorded
an average
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number
of
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lost
days of around 6-7 days for the three-time periods.

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see
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country
of Germany to be the most efficient
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country
in reducing work-related
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injuries
. The
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country
has
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seen
a declining trend for the periods covered with its lowest level
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recorded
in 2001-2005 at 2 days.
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country
of America and Korea which
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saw
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recorded
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number
of days
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lost
to the median range of 5 days.

Overall
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highly
developed
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countries
are more effective in
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combatting
work-related
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injuries
thereby
efficiently
reducing the
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number
of days
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lost
due to it. Meanwhile, developing
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countries
like Brazil and China,
still
need to
forcefully
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improve
their safety standards at work.
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IELTS academic This bar graph shows the number of days lost due to injury per worker for three countries. There are three time periods shown beginning with the year 1991 and ending in 2005.

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