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This bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who is a teacher in six different education systems in the UK in 2010.

This bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who is a teacher in six different education systems in the UK in 2010. KlL96
This bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who is a teacher in six different education systems in the UK in 2010. As the chart show, the women have a higher percentage than the men in the nursery, pre-school, primary and secondary school. In contrast, men have a higher percent in private training institutes and universities. The percentage of females working for nursery and pre-school accounts for nearly 100% while there just over 0% male work at here. In a university, men have accounted for nearly 70% which is considerably higher than a woman, just under 30%. In college, the number of female teachers is the same as a men. They all account for near 50%.
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, the women have a higher percentage than the
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in the nursery,
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, primary and secondary school.
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have a higher percent in private training institutes and universities.

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over 0% male work at here. In a university,
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70% which is
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. They all account for near 50%.

IELTS academic This bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who is a teacher in six different education systems in the UK in 2010.

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