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The pie chart illustrates the percentages of the share of the world population deserving vaccination in various areas and the bar chart demonstrates the amount of the dose these people vaccinated with COVID-19 vaccine in these locations in 2021

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The pie chart illustrates the percentages of the share of the world population deserving vaccination in various areas and the bar chart demonstrates the amount of the dose these people vaccinated with COVID-19 vaccine in these locations in 2021 In general, what stands out is that while China has the highest in population and vaccinated rate, that of Africa is the least in vaccinated according to its population ratio. Looking at locations having a high population, it can be clearly understood that the biggest rate population with nearly 18% in these sections is China with approximately 33% person vaccinated. Additionally, although locations with the same percentages in people deserving vaccinate are India and Africa with around 17%, India is a higher vaccinated ratio than that of Africa with 14. 8% and 2. 8% respectively. Regarding the different places with low population rates, whereas the U. S has the lowest in both rates population with 4. 2% and vaccinated with 6%, European countries are the opposite, having 5. 7% population and 8. 5%. Also, 5. 5% population of South America has 7. 3% individuals vaccinated.
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deserving vaccination in various areas and the bar chart demonstrates the amount of the dose these
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vaccinated with COVID-19 vaccine in these locations in 2021

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and vaccinated
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, that of Africa is the least in vaccinated according to its
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ratio.

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, it can be
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understood that the biggest
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18% in these sections is China with approximately 33% person vaccinated.
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are India and Africa with around 17%, India is a higher vaccinated ratio than that of Africa with 14. 8% and 2. 8%
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with 4. 2% and vaccinated with 6%, European countries are the opposite, having 5. 7%
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and 8. 5%.
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of South America has 7. 3% individuals vaccinated.

IELTS academic The pie chart illustrates the percentages of the share of the world population deserving vaccination in various areas and the bar chart demonstrates the amount of the dose these people vaccinated with COVID-19 vaccine in these locations in 2021

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