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These day the mean standard of health in people become low than it use to be, and it will be likely lower in future

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These day the mean standard of health in people become low than it use to be, and it will be likely lower in future. n my opinion I completely agree that the standard of people's health will be lower in the future. -irstly, when Covid 19 start world become shut down and. prevent people from going out from home. And this is the egining of teachnolgy to develop to make people more comfortble at home. When teachnology become part of people life it can help people with many way for example people may think that no need to go out for shopping cause they can shopping from online which is more convenient from them. Therefore this may be cause people o movement less and spent time in sofa or chair more. Another point to consider is people in present tend to eat take out food more than cooking food at home. Food that cook at home is easy to reduce ingredient that can be unhealthy such as sugar, salt, oil. In the other hand food that already cook can't reduce ingredient that unhealthy. But why people prefer to buy food than cooking at home? because in the present that everything need to be in hurry and there are food that can delivery at your front door without wasting time cooking food and it more delicious. This trend has become more popular in these days and it will keep grow every year may cause people to be less heathy. In conclusion, people's standard average health will be lower in the future because teachology can develop in every year and become more comfortable for people to be more at home than going out also food that convenient for people to buy become popular than homemade food because people would spending time to do something than cooking food.
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the mean standard of health in
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my opinion I completely
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world
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shut down and.
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prevent
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egining
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teachnolgy
to develop to
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make
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people
more
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comfortble
at home. When
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teachnology
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part of

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life it can
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that no need to go out for shopping

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o movement less and spent time in sofa or chair more.

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in present tend to eat take out
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more than cooking
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food
at home.
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cook at home is easy to
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ingredient that can be unhealthy such as sugar, salt, oil. In the other hand
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already cook can't
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ingredient that unhealthy.
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food
than cooking at home?

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that can delivery at your front door

without wasting time cooking
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and
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it
more delicious. This trend has
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more popular in these days and it

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's standard average health will be lower in the future
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teachology
can develop in every

year and
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more comfortable for
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people
to be more at home than going out
also
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that convenient for

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people
to
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buy
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popular than homemade
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food
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would
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cooking
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IELTS academic These day the mean standard of health in people become low than it use to be, and it will be likely lower in future

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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