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The no. Of students attending courses

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The bar chart illustrated the amount of the student’s presence in three main courses between 2001 and 2004. It is clear that students attended in course C increasing little by little. Meanwhile, course B was subject to overall volatility over four years. In the first two years, the quantity of students was in course A was likely to decrease from 4, 3 millions to 2, 5 millions. After a slight lull, the number of students in course A tended to increase to 4. 5 millions in two year’s time. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the amount of the attenders in course B and finally stood at nearly 3 millions in 2004. There was a period of stability in the figure for course C, at 2 millions in 2001 and 2002. After two years, the students were in course C saw increase to the highest point, at 5 millions in 2004.
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between 2001 and 2004.

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C increasing
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. Meanwhile,
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B was subject to
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volatility over four years.

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students
was in
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course
A was likely to decrease from 4, 3
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millions
to 2, 5
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millions
. After a slight lull, the number of
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students
in
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course
A tended to increase to 4. 5
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millions
in two year’s time. Meanwhile, there was a fluctuation in the amount of the attenders in
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course
B and
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stood at
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3
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millions
in 2004.

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course
C, at 2
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millions
in 2001 and 2002. After two years, the
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were in
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C
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IELTS academic The no. Of students attending courses

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