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There is an ongoing debate among people whether it is better to accept any adverse circumstances related to employment and poor financial conditions or to put some effort to ameliorate these situations. The former statement is justifiable to some extent but I endorse the latter idea and this essay will negotiate both these views along with my opinion in the proceeding paragraphs

There is an ongoing debate among people whether it is better to accept any adverse circumstances related to employment and poor financial conditions or to put some effort to ameliorate these situations. The former statement is justifiable to some extent but I endorse the latter idea and this essay will negotiate both these views along with my opinion in the proceeding paragraphs. To commence with, there are numerous plausible reasons why a large number of masses believe in being satisfied with available things, as the prominent cause is unemployment. Since the population has inclined, the rate of unemployed recruits is increasing day by day. Consequently, it is hard to find a new job with desirable requirements like higher dignity, a friendly workplace and so on. Moreover, in the run of chasing deluxe life, various individuals take loans and debts from banks to buy expensive commodities. For instance, according to a survey conducted by an American college, the proportion of debtors has been increased by 60% in the last decade. Subsequently, these are the facts why many people think it is better to be grateful for what they have instead of worrying. On the contrary, others say that they should try to overcome these kinds of issues because some employees do not indulge themselves in extracurricular activities as they are busy with their hectic schedules which are depriving their mental peace and contentment, which further make the unpleasant environment in the office. Along with this, people should try to learn more courses related to their recruitment which would further help them to achieve their preferable job. For example, workers who use to involve in other recreational facilities are more likely to perform better and accomplish their tasks before deadlines. Hence, by taking care of mental and physical health, recruits would make a favourable workplace. In conclusion, although people should gratify with their present situations but should make efforts to fulfil their needs and I opined that workers should equally focus on their health to get desirable outcomes.

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