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There has been an argument that : 'Technological advances are greatly contributing to the high rate of environmental pollution.' To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There has been an argument that: 'Technological advances are greatly contributing to the high rate of environmental pollution. ' G9xbB
It is argued by some that breakthrough in technology is attributed to the rapid rate of pollution of the environment. In this essay, I will point out some reasons why I disagree with this statement. To begin with, technology can help to create renewable resources, which are considered to be clean and environmentally friendly. This is because most renewable energy sources produce little to no global warming emissions. For example, many countries have built plants that utilize solar energy to generate power. As a result, people can create electricity without dependence on fossil fuels, which inflict considerable harm to the environment. There is no doubt that cutting-edge technology is now playing a vital role in environmental preservation. In addition to the reason above, I also believe that applying technological advancements is an effective way to reduce and even eliminate waste from specific sectors. In other words, technological progress assists people in recycling materials including paper, glass, or plastic while traditional recycling does not work for some types of plastic packaging. For instance, Japan has been collecting bottles for reuse and they are used to make a variety of textile products with the sophisticated system possessed by this country. Consequently, it will lower the number of plastic bottles, as well as prevent the overuse of raw materials. In conclusion, I believe that advances in technology exert a positive influence on the protection of the environment on account of generating renewable energy and waste minimization. This will help humans to tackle environmental challenges and improve sustainability.
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some
that breakthrough in
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technology
is attributed
to the rapid rate of pollution of the environment. In this essay, I will point out
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some
reasons why I disagree with this statement. To
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begin
with,
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technology
can
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help
to create renewable resources, which
are considered
to be clean and
environmentally
friendly. This is
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because
most renewable energy sources produce
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little
to no global warming emissions.
For example
,
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many
countries have built plants that utilize solar energy to generate power.
As a result
,
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people
can create electricity without dependence on fossil fuels, which inflict considerable harm to the environment. There is no doubt that cutting-edge
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technology
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
playing a vital role in environmental preservation.
In addition
to the reason above, I
also
believe that applying technological advancements is an effective way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
and even eliminate waste from specific sectors.
In other words
, technological progress assists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in recycling materials including paper, glass, or plastic while traditional recycling does not work for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
types of plastic packaging.
For instance
, Japan has been collecting bottles for
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reuse and
they are
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used
to
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make
a variety of textile products with the sophisticated system possessed by this country.
Consequently
, it will lower the number of plastic bottles,
as well
as
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prevent
the overuse of raw materials.
In conclusion
, I believe that advances in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
exert a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
influence on the protection of the environment on account of generating renewable energy and waste minimization. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
humans to tackle environmental challenges and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
sustainability.

IELTS academic There has been an argument that: 'Technological advances are greatly contributing to the high rate of environmental pollution. '

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