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the volume of graduated men and women from colleges in Canada

the volume of graduated men and women from colleges in Canada Y2AYK

The preceding chart illustrates the volume of graduated men and women from colleges in Canada. It is obvious that the number of graduates increased dramatically. According to what is shown the number of graduated females between (1992-2006) had a slight rose between 1992 and 1996 from about 100000 to 105000 student in addition to a slight decrease in 1997. Although it had grown in the next decade. In 2006 the number of famels was close to 150000. On one hand, the amount of the males had a gradual growth in 1995 nearly to 75000 when it declined modestly in the next three years. Furthermore, it varied between until 2002 when it grows up rapidly to 95000 in 2006 which was a slow g. Overall, the number of male students is third the female students in and had a moderately increase comparing to women to about the half after more than a decade

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 and women from colleges in Canada. It is obvious that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
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.

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 was close to 150000.

On one hand, the amount of the males had a gradual growth in 1995 nearly
 to 75000 when it declined modestly
 in the next
 three years. Furthermore
, it varied between until 2002 when it grows up rapidly
 to 95000 in 2006 which was a slow g.

Overall
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
number
 of male students is third the female students in and had a You used an adverb ('moderately') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
moderately increase
 comparing to women to about the half after more than a decade