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the first chart shows the population of england and wales between 1700 and 2000

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The bar charts demonstrates the number of people and the birth and death rates in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Overall, it is obvious that the population followed an upward trend throughout the years, whereas there was a fluctuation in the proportion of birth and death rates per 1000 people and had a decrease in the end. In the first bar chart, it is clearly seen that there was a significant rise in the number of people in these two countries. From 1700 to 1800 the population had a gradual increase until it skyrocketed to almost 40 million people in 1900. In 2000, the population reached a peak which was almost five times as much as the total number of people in 1700. In addition, both the birth and death rate in the second bar chart fluctuated over the years. In 1800, the birth and death pe reached a peak of around 23% and 17% respectively. Then, the proportion of birth and death rate both had a noticeable decrease in the next ten years period, declining to no more than 15% for the birth rate and 10% for the death.
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in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.
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and had a decrease in the
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that there was a significant rise in the number of
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in these two countries. From 1700 to 1800 the population had a gradual increase until it skyrocketed to almost 40 million
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people
in 1900. In 2000, the population reached a peak which was almost five times as much as the total number of
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people
in 1700.

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, both the
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in the second bar chart fluctuated over the years.
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1800, the
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reached a peak of around 23% and 17%
respectively
. Then, the proportion of
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and death
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both had a noticeable decrease in the
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and 10% for the death.
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