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the information of two surveys that were done in a hotel

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The preceding data provides the information of two surveys that were done in a hotel. It is obvious that the numbers changed sharply. According to what is shown, the first chart represents the customer service in the Parkway Hotel in2005 by 100 guests. 45 percent of the customers consider that the service was satisfactory, and nearly half of this proportion rated it as poor. Only 15 percent of students rated the services as very poor. On the other hand, hardly 5 percent of the 100 guests said that it was excellent and 14 percent rated it as good. Although the proportion in 2005 was horrible it actually raised rapidly in 2010. The services were excellent five times more. The highest proportion of customers said that the work was good. And about 17 to 12 percent ranked it as poor or very poor. Overall, the services in the Parkway hotel grow sharply in a short time.
The preceding data provides the information of two surveys that
were done
in a hotel. It is obvious that the numbers
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changed
sharply
.

According to what
is shown
, the
first
chart represents the customer
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service
in the Parkway Hotel in2005 by 100 guests. 45
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percent
of the customers consider that the
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service
was satisfactory, and
nearly
half of this proportion rated it as poor.
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Only
15
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percent
of students rated the
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services
as
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very
poor.
On the other hand
, hardly 5
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percent
of the 100 guests said that it was excellent and 14
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percent
rated it as
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good
.

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Although
the proportion in 2005 was horrible it actually raised
rapidly
in 2010. The
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services
were excellent five times more. The highest proportion of customers said that the work was
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good
. And about 17 to 12
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percent
ranked it as poor or
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very
poor.

Overall
, the
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services
in the Parkway hotel grow
sharply
in a short time.

IELTS academic the information of two surveys that were done in a hotel

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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