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The two plans illustrate the main changes of the school, since 2000.

The two plans illustrate the main changes of the school, since 2000. Nw5rj
The two plans illustrate the main changes of the school, since 2000. Overall, It is clear that the school has experienced significant developments, becoming more modernized. This has been possible at the expense of large areas of fiction stage that one existed. In 2000, the entrance which was situated in the west of the building still stands, and the travel room to the east of that. Like it, service desk which was located in southern-west corner of the school building, so new books room between travel and service desk remains unchanged. On the other hand, both fiction sections which stood in the north of the school had been replaced by 5 various Room, namely art, hobbies, cookery, fiction, and non-fiction, so non-fiction in the south of the place was demolished to make cafe to serve their students, and art, hobbies and cookery which was settled in the center of the school was redeveloped with a new tables erecting to sit them there.
The two plans illustrate the main
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, since 2000.

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, It is
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clear
that the
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has experienced significant developments, becoming more modernized. This has been possible at the expense of large areas of fiction stage that one existed.

In 2000, the entrance which
was situated
in the west of the building
still
stands, and the travel room to the east of that. Like it, service desk which
was located
in southern-west corner of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
building,
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so
new books room between travel and service desk remains unchanged.

On the other hand
, both fiction sections which stood in the north of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
had
been replaced
by 5 various Room,
namely
art, hobbies, cookery, fiction, and non-fiction,
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so
non-fiction in the south of the place
was demolished
to
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make
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
to serve their students, and art, hobbies and cookery which
was settled
in the center of the
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school
was redeveloped
with a new tables erecting to sit them there.
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IELTS academic The two plans illustrate the main changes of the school, since 2000.

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4 paragraphs
162 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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