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The diagram depicts images of the advancement of tools used for cutting 1.4 million and 0.8 million years ago.

The diagram depicts images of the advancement of tools used for cutting 1. 4 million and 0. 8 million years ago. y75Rd
The diagram depicts images of the advancement of tools used for cutting 1. 4 million and 0. 8 million years ago. Overall, it is clear that the tools in both periods had narrower lateral views compared to the the other sides. In addition, the sharp edge of both tools had equal measurement. According to the diagram, tool A which was used 1. 4 million years ago had a broad front and back view. On the other hand, when viewed from the side, this equipment had a narrow edge which depicted the cutting surface. However, in the two stones age eras, the stoned maintained a similar 5cm measurement. Tool B which was developed 0. 6 million years later had particular modification which included an anterior and posterior view that was widened substantially hence appearing almost twice the former one. In contrary to stone A, on the side section, the object was about half the size of the object used in the earlier stone age. Additionally, the item exhibited a more streamlined and sharper outlook.
The diagram depicts images of the advancement of
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for cutting 1. 4
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and 0. 8
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that the
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in both periods had narrower lateral views compared to
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the the
other sides.
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, the sharp edge of both
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had equal measurement.

According to the diagram,
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A which was
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used
1. 4
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million
years ago had a broad front and back view.
On the other hand
, when viewed from the side, this equipment had a narrow edge which depicted the cutting surface.
However
, in the two stones age eras, the stoned maintained a similar
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5cm
measurement.

Tool B which
was developed
0. 6
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million
years later had particular modification which included an anterior and posterior view that
was widened
substantially
hence
appearing almost twice the former one. In contrary to stone A, on the side section, the object was about half the size of the object
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used
in the earlier
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stone age
.
Additionally
, the item exhibited a more streamlined and sharper outlook.
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IELTS academic The diagram depicts images of the advancement of tools used for cutting 1. 4 million and 0. 8 million years ago.

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