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The two pie charts indicate the percentages of five kinds of energy sources in France in the year 1995 and 2005.

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The two pie charts indicate the percentages of five kinds of energy sources in France in the year 1995 and 2005. Generally, it is obvious that, gas and coal were the most significant energy sources which together took up over halves of the charts in both years. Over the 10 year period, there were only minimal changes in all types of energy production. By the comparison of the two charts, there were only inconsiderable changes in the proportions of energy produced by gas and coal. The level of energy produced by coal stood at 29. 80% in the first year and then rose slightly to 30. 9% in 2005. Likewise, gas generated 29. 63% which rose marginally to 30. 1% 10 years later. Similarly nuclear sector has also advanced its production from 6. 40% to 10. 10% with an overall increase of almost 4% in 10 years. On the other hand, perto, which was the only energy source with a decline rate of production, decreased in production from 29. 27% in 1995 to around a fifth (19. 55%) in 2005.
The two pie charts indicate the percentages of five kinds of
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energy
sources in France in the
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year
1995 and 2005.
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, it is obvious that, gas and coal were the most significant
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energy
sources which together took up over halves of the charts in both years. Over the 10
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year
period, there were
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only
minimal
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changes
in all types of
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energy
production.

By the comparison of the two charts, there were
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only
inconsiderable
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changes
in the proportions of
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energy
produced by gas and coal. The level of
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energy
produced by coal stood at 29. 80% in the
first
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year
and then rose
slightly
to 30. 9% in 2005.
Likewise
, gas generated 29. 63% which rose
marginally
to 30. 1% 10 years later.
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Similarly
nuclear sector has
also
advanced its production from 6. 40% to 10. 10% with an
overall
increase of almost 4% in 10 years.

On the other hand
,
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perto
, which was the
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only
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energy
source with a decline rate of production, decreased in production from 29. 27% in 1995 to around a fifth (19. 55%) in 2005.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts indicate the percentages of five kinds of energy sources in France in the year 1995 and 2005.

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