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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two pie illustrate the last year world`s total energy consuming and generated electricity mentioning seven different resources. Overall, the highest energy consumption is oil by 34. 3% of all percentage. And the lowest source is other energy source by 0. 4%. While coal is the highest world energy generation by overall 39. 8%. In the other hand, other electricity generation counts for 2. 1% of total percentage. Oil is most consumed that generated in the world for the last year. Looking at both pie charts, oil is used by 34. 3% while it is generated by 6. 7% In the other hand, coal is more generated than consumed (639. 8%, 25. 1% respectively). Comparing other energy resources, gas is almost both consumed and generated in the last year. Moreover, nuclear and hydro electricity generation  is higher than electricity consumption (which is 16. 1% and 15. 1% in order). last but not least, combustible renewables & wastes are only consumed energy by 10. 6% of all percentage. However, we can find some other resources which are consumed by 0. 4% and generated by 2. 1%
The two pie illustrate the last year
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total
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energy
consuming

and
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electricity mentioning seven
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different
resources.

Overall
, the highest
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energy
consumption is oil by 34. 3% of all

percentage. And the lowest source is
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other
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source by 0. 4%.

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coal is the highest world
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generation by
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39. 8%. In the
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hand,
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electricity generation counts for 2. 1% of total

percentage.

Oil is most consumed that
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in the world for the last year.

Looking at both pie charts, oil is
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used
by 34. 3% while it
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by 6. 7%

In the
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hand, coal is more
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generated
than consumed (639. 8%, 25. 1%
respectively
).

Comparing
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other
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resources, gas is almost both consumed

and
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generated
in the last year.
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, nuclear and
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hydro electricity
generation
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is higher than electricity consumption (which is

16. 1% and 15. 1% in order).
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last
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not least, combustible

renewables & wastes are
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consumed
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by 10. 6% of all

percentage.
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resources which
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by 2. 1%
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IELTS academic The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year.

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