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The two pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980 1990 and 2000 v.1

The two pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980 1990 and 2000 v. 1
The two pie charts illustrates the share of yearly expenditures by local authorities in Someland in three different years. It is clear that, in each of the given years, the proportion of total spending for higher education was by far the highest. According to the pie chart, in 1980, 35% of total expenditure went on higher education, with that for k-12 education representing exactly a third. The figures for transportation and health and human resources were not quite as high as that, each at approximately 15%. Next comes environmental services and other expenses, each at around a small farction. After increasing slightly to 45% in 1980, the percentage of annual spending for higher education stood at two fifths. Turning to k-12 education, the figure dropped to nearly one fifth at the end of the period. Looking at transportation, 6% of annual expenditure was allocated to that in 1990 before rising to a peak of 22% in 2000. Despite slight fluctation, the figure for health and human resources decreased to 10% at the end of the period. With regard to environmental services, the share of total spending for that improved to 9% by 2000. By contrast, the relevant figure for other expenses declined to 1% by the end of the period.
The two pie charts illustrates the share of yearly expenditures by local authorities in
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Someland
in three
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different
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clear
that, in each of the
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given
years, the proportion of total spending for higher
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education
was by far the highest.

According to the pie chart, in 1980, 35% of total expenditure went on higher
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education
, with that for k-12
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education
representing exactly a third. The
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figures
for transportation and health and human resources were not quite as high as that, each at approximately 15%.
Next
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comes
environmental services and other expenses, each at around a
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small
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farction
.

After increasing
slightly
to 45% in 1980, the percentage of annual spending for higher
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education
stood at two fifths. Turning to k-12
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education
, the
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figure
dropped to
nearly
one fifth at the
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end
of the period. Looking at transportation, 6% of annual expenditure
was allocated
to that in 1990
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before
rising to a peak of 22% in 2000. Despite slight
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fluctation
, the
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figure
for health and human resources decreased to 10% at the
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end
of the period. With regard to environmental services, the share of total spending for that
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improved
to 9% by 2000. By contrast, the relevant
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figure
for other expenses declined to 1% by the
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end
of the period.
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IELTS academic The two pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980 1990 and 2000 v. 1

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6.0
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