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The two maps depict the main changes that have taken place in Grange Park,an Arnold Avenue, between the year 1920 and today.

The two maps depict the main changes that have taken place in Grange Park, an Arnold Avenue, between the year 1920 and today. 2RPW6
The two maps depict the main changes that have taken place in Grange Park, an Arnold Avenue, between the year 1920 and today. In general, it appears that Grange Park has become much more recreational with far more places for concerts, and cafes and playing areas. Another important development is replacing one of the rose gardens and seats in the park center. As for the city centre, it has been converted into seats only area where you can also look at a lovely view of garden. There used to be a stage for musicians to the west of the park center, but it was demolished to make way for an amphitheatre for concerts. It is also noticeable that a glasshouse was knocked down and there is built a water feature to the south-east of the park. Regarding a pond of water plants and rose garden in the north-east of park, it were replaced by children's play area and cafe. There is also the rose garden in the north-west of park, it has experienced no change. Finally, another important development is the introduction of entrance underground car park in the corner to south- east of the park.
The two maps depict the main
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changes
that have taken place in Grange
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Park
, an Arnold Avenue, between the year 1920 and
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today
.

In general
, it appears that Grange
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Park
has become much more recreational with far more places for concerts, and
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cafes
and playing areas. Another
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important
development is replacing one of the rose
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gardens
and seats in the
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park
center.

As for the city
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centre
, it has
been converted
into seats
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only
area where you can
also
look at a lovely view of
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garden
. There
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used
to be a stage for musicians to the west of the
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park
center,
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but
it
was demolished
to
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make
way for an
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amphitheatre
for concerts. It is
also
noticeable that a glasshouse
was knocked
down and there
is built
a water feature to the south-east of the park.

Regarding a pond of water plants and rose
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garden
in the north-east of
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park
, it
were replaced
by children's play area and
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
. There is
also
the rose
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garden
in the north-west of
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park
, it has experienced no
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change
.
Finally
, another
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important
development is the introduction of entrance underground car
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park
in the corner to south- east of the
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park
.

IELTS academic The two maps depict the main changes that have taken place in Grange Park, an Arnold Avenue, between the year 1920 and today.

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