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The two maps compare the diagram of a school in 2004 with a new design in the plan for the year 2024.

The two maps compare the diagram of a school in 2004 with a new design in the plan for the year 2024. 2RQWx
The two maps compare the diagram of a school in 2004 with a new design in the plan for the year 2024. Overall, it is clear that there are significant changes in the school site, especially a new school building is built. The school will be able to accommodate a large number of students. In 2004, the school had 600 students with two school buildings that were separated by a path starting from the main entrance to the sports field. By the year 2024, the change of the campus is the third building will have been constructed with the expectation that the school can accommodate 1000 students. Following the design, two original buildings will be attached together and the path will be shortened that links the buildings only. By contrast, the third construction and a new car park will be built on the site of the sports field. So a new sports field will be removed and moved to the southeast. Besides that, a new road will be added from the main entrance to the second car park. Finally, the main entrance and the first car park will be preserved.
The two maps compare the diagram of a
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in 2004 with a
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new
design in the plan for the year 2024.

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, it is
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clear
that there are significant
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changes
in the
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school
site,
especially
a
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new
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school
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building
is built
. The
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school
will be able to accommodate
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a large number of
students.

In 2004, the
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school
had 600 students with two
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school
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buildings
that
were separated
by a path starting from the main entrance to the sports field. By the year 2024, the
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change
of the campus is the third
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building
will have
been constructed
with the expectation that the
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school
can accommodate 1000 students. Following the design, two original
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buildings
will
be attached
together and the path will
be shortened
that links the
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buildings
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only
.

By contrast, the third construction and a
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new
car park will
be built
on the site of the sports field.
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So
a
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new
sports field will
be removed
and
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moved
to the southeast.
Besides
that, a
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new
road will be
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added
from the main entrance to the second car park.
Finally
, the main entrance and the
first
car park will
be preserved
.
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IELTS academic The two maps compare the diagram of a school in 2004 with a new design in the plan for the year 2024.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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