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Bar graph exhibit the information about the production and consumption of electricity

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The following bar graph exhibits the information about the production and consumption of electricity of top ten nations of the world in year 2014. The data has been calibrated in billion KWH. It is clearly seen from the given bar graph that the China used maximum electric power as well produces more electric energy as compared to other empires in year 2014 which was calculated as 5, 398 and 5322 billion KWH respectively. However, Russia had pruduced, likewise utilised equal amount of electricity. Considering the remaining part of the bar graph that Korea consumed and produced very less electricity rather than other countries which was recorded at 449. 5 and 485. 1 billion KWH whereas, Brazil and Germany used same amount of electricity in the year 2014 and that was noted as 526. 6 and 530. 7 billion KWH respectively. To receptulate, the China had produced and consumed more electricity as compared to other nations.
The following bar graph exhibits the information about the production and consumption of
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electricity
of top ten nations of the world in year 2014. The data has
been calibrated
in
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billion
KWH. It is
clearly
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seen
from the
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given
bar graph that the China
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used
maximum electric power
as well
produces more electric energy as compared to other empires in year 2014 which
was calculated
as 5, 398 and 5322
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billion
KWH
respectively
.
However
, Russia had
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pruduced
,
likewise
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utilised
equal amount of
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electricity
. Considering the remaining part of the bar graph that Korea consumed and produced
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very
less
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electricity
rather
than other countries which
was recorded
at 449. 5 and 485. 1
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billion
KWH whereas, Brazil and Germany
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used
same amount of
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electricity
in the year 2014 and that
was noted
as 526. 6 and 530. 7
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billion
KWH
respectively
. To
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receptulate
, the China had produced and consumed more
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electricity
as compared to other nations.
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IELTS academic Bar graph exhibit the information about the production and consumption of electricity

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