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smoking between male and femele

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Presented line graph depict the proportions of smoking among males and females in somaliland from 1960 till 2000. It is obvious from the graph that smoking among the men fell steadily in all the period of time and we can see from graph that smoking among women have a somewhat growth over the period. Initially, there weren't considerable changes among men, However in the middle of the period these rates decreased rapidly from 450 till 250. It is essential to mention that male's rates never increased and only declined. Ifr i express females' proportions on smoking, there was a visible fluctuation in the index of women. Between 1960 and 1975, it witnessed considerable variation and went uo untill almost 300 rate. Unfortunately after that it began to decrease steadily

Presented line graph depict the proportions of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfrenziedfanaticaldeliriouszealousenthusiasticcrazed
smoking
 among males and females in Possible spelling mistake found.Somaliland
somaliland
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 1960 to 2000"?from 1960 to 2000
from 1960 till 2000
. It is obvious from the graph that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfrenziedfanaticaldeliriouszealousenthusiasticcrazed
smoking
 among the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 fell steadily
 in all the period of Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).time, and
time and
 we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 from graph that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfrenziedfanaticaldeliriouszealousenthusiasticcrazed
smoking
 among women have a You used an adverb ('somewhat') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('growth') instead of another adjective.
somewhat growth
 over the period. Initially
, there weren't considerable This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :altersadjusts
changes
 among This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
, However
 in the middle of the period these rates decreased rapidly
Nonstandard phrase. Did you mean: "from 450 to 250"?from 450 to 250
from 450 till 250
. It is essential to mention that male's rates never increased and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 declined. Possible spelling mistake found.IFRIfCFRIFAIFCSFR
Ifr
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 express females' proportions on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfrenziedfanaticaldeliriouszealousenthusiasticcrazed
smoking
, there was a visible fluctuation in the index of women. Between 1960 and 1975, it witnessed considerable variation and went Possible spelling mistake found.UOtogonosoup
uo
Possible spelling mistake found.untiluntil l
untill
 almost 300 rate. Unfortunately after that it began to decrease Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphsteadily.steadily!steadily?steadily:steadily,steadily;
steadily