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The two maps compare the change of a community center in the past and present. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparison where relevent.

The two maps compare the change of a community center in the past and present. 0nMr3
Presented are two maps depicting the change in the layout of a community center from the past to now. As transparent from the maps, the function of the facility is simplified with some areas being demolished and erected. In the past, the community center could be reached by the entrance in the north-east. This entrance led to a large car park, which was situated on the left of the layout and occupied two-fifths of it. Next to the car park, to the south-west corner, a garden was located and also covered the same area as the parking place. The remaining facilities of the center included two meeting rooms built in the left upper corner, an art room and an IT room located next to them on their right, and a cafe connected the meeting room with the garden. Moreover, at the center of the layout, there was a gym, which can lead to many other functional areas. At present, the community center has experienced some significant change as its function is simplified. The most striking change is the car park, which is expanded one and a half times and now occupies three-fourths the layout of the center. The garden next to the parking place in the past now has been removed to make room for its expansion. Similarly, two function areas namely cafe and gym have also been demolished and replaced by the reception. Moreover, next to the large car park, the IT room has been extended slightly while the art room size has shrunk. However, two meeting rooms are two that do not have adjustment as they still remain unchanged.
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change
in the
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layout
of a community center from the past to
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now
.

As transparent from the maps, the function of the facility
is simplified
with
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some
areas
being demolished
and erected.

In the past, the community center could
be reached
by the entrance in the north-east. This entrance led to a large
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car
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park
, which
was situated
on the
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left
of the
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layout
and occupied two-fifths of it.
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Next
to the
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car
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park
, to the south-west corner, a garden
was located
and
also
covered the same area as the parking place. The remaining facilities of the center included two meeting
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rooms
built in the
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left
upper corner, an art
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room
and an IT
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room
located
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next
to them on their right, and a
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cafe
connected the meeting
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room
with the garden.
Moreover
, at the center of the
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layout
, there was a gym, which can lead to
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many
other functional areas.

At present, the community center has experienced
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some
significant
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change
as its function
is simplified
. The most striking
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change
is the
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car
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park
, which
is expanded
one and a half times and
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now
occupies three-fourths the
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layout
of the center. The garden
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next
to the parking place in the past
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now
has
been removed
to
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make
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room
for its expansion.
Similarly
, two function areas
namely
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cafe
and gym have
also
been demolished
and replaced by the reception.
Moreover
,
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next
to the large
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car
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park
, the IT
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room
has
been extended
slightly
while the art
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room
size has shrunk.
However
, two meeting
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rooms
are two that do not have adjustment as they
still
remain unchanged.
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