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Diagram depict the information about the changes a park fron 1980 to now.

Diagram depict the information about the changes a park fron 1980 to now. PgMOw
The provided diagram represents the information about the modification of a public park from 1980 till the present time. As an overview, it is noticeable that the public park has too changed now. The ultra modern facilities are added in present and the boundary walls are removed in current time. Looking into details, in 1980 the park had two entrance's the one entrance was in north West side and second was in the south east. Furthermore, the whole park was covered with boundary walls. There was a small pond in oval shape in west side along aside benches. In addition, in the front of pond flowers in South with rectangle shape. In the south east, near the second entrance there were flowers in the shape of square. In the north east corner large number of trees were in triangle shape. Glancing ahead, in the current time park has totally changed. The entrance is in four directions and boundary walls removed now. This region is changed into an open area. The pond side is remained same with its benches. In contrast, the flowers side modify into bush and it's area moderately reduce now. The flowers which were located in South east it replaced now into play ground and shape of this area has no changed. The trees area properly changed in present time. It is developed now into a picnic area and it's shape is also changed, now it is in circular shape situated in north west direction.
The provided diagram represents the information about the modification of a public
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park
from 1980 till the present
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time
. As an overview, it is noticeable that the public
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park
has too
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changed
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now
. The ultra modern facilities are
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added
in present and the boundary walls
are removed
in
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current
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time
. Looking into
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details
, in 1980 the
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park
had
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two entrance
's the one entrance was in north West side and second was in the
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south east
.
Furthermore
, the whole
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park
was covered
with boundary walls. There was a
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small
pond in oval
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shape
in west side along aside benches.
In addition
, in the front of pond
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flowers
in South with rectangle
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shape
. In the
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south east
, near the second entrance there were
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flowers
in the
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shape
of square.
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In
the
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north east
corner large number of trees were in triangle
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shape
. Glancing ahead, in the
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current
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time
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park
has
totally
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changed
. The entrance is in four directions and boundary walls removed
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now
. This region is
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changed
into an open
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area
. The pond side
is remained
same with its benches.
In contrast
, the
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flowers
side modify into bush and it's
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area
moderately
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reduce
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now
. The
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flowers
which
were located
in South east it replaced
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now
into play ground and
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shape
of this
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area
has no
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changed
. The
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trees
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area
properly
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changed
in present
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time
. It
is developed
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now
into a picnic
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area
and it's
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shape
is
also
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changed
,
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now
it is in circular
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shape
situated in
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north west
direction.
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