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The two maps compare recreational facilities which were built in two different time on a certain island.

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The two maps compare recreational facilities which were built in two different time on a certain island. In the first map, it seems quite obvious, that there is not much tourist facility on the island for tourist except a small coastal area for swimming on the left side of the island. Also, there are some trees planted in the eastern and western part of the island. However, in the second map there are changes. Firstly a reception was built in the middle of the island, and it was connected to a restaurant in the northern part and to a pier in the southern part by car track. There are also some boats around the pier for sailing. Secondly, many accommodation units were constructed in the left and right side of the reception which are connected to each other by footpath. Overall, as can be seen, many buildings were built on the island, so there are many possibilities for tourists.
The two maps compare recreational facilities which
were built
in two
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different
time on a certain island.

In the
first
map, it seems quite obvious, that there is not much tourist facility on the
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island
for tourist except a
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small
coastal area for swimming on the
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left
side of the
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island
.
Also
, there are
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some
trees planted in the eastern and western part of the island.

However
, in the second map there are
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changes
.
Firstly
a reception
was built
in the middle of the
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island
, and it
was connected
to a restaurant in the northern part and to a pier in the southern part by car
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track
. There are
also
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some
boats around the pier for sailing.
Secondly
,
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many
accommodation units
were constructed
in the
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left
and right side of the reception which
are connected
to each other by footpath.

Overall
, as can be
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seen
,
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many
buildings
were built
on the
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island
,
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so
there are
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many
possibilities for tourists.
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IELTS academic The two maps compare recreational facilities which were built in two different time on a certain island.

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4 paragraphs
159 words
6.5
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