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The graph below guves information about the progress of certain diseases during childhood between 1950 and 2000 in developed country.

The graph below guves information about the progress of certain diseases during childhood between 1950 and 2000 in developed country. do8NP
The given line graph supplied inforamtion about the progress of certain diseases period of childhood from 1950 to 2000 in modern countries. Overall, it is evident that, the highest percentage is in 1970 approximately 14000, also the lowest rate is in 1980 just under than 6000. Annualy cases includes thousands with 4 several diseases. In the beginning, the line graph depicts information about AIDS, Malaria, Smallpox and Tuberculosis. 6 various years show the numbers of these diseases, how many areas spread. In two different years depicts same 10000 number. Initially, in first and foremost year percentage of diseases reached a peak. The tuberclosis diseases placed more number rather than three illnesses. In 1980 the lowest number shows while Malaria replaced roughly 2000. In addition, three several years also describe various diseases, most popular diseases in this year is Tuberclosis and Malaria.
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inforamtion
about the progress of certain
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diseases
period of childhood from 1950 to 2000 in modern countries.
Overall
, it is evident that, the highest percentage is in 1970 approximately 14000,
also
the lowest rate is in 1980
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than 6000.
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cases includes thousands with 4 several
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diseases
. In the beginning, the line graph depicts information about AIDS, Malaria, Smallpox and Tuberculosis. 6 various years
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the
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of these
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diseases
, how
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many
areas spread. In two
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years depicts same 10000
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.
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and foremost
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year
percentage of
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reached a peak. The
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tuberclosis
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diseases
placed more
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rather
than three illnesses. In 1980 the lowest
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number
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while Malaria replaced roughly 2000.
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, three several years
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, most popular
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in this
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is
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Tuberclosis
and Malaria.
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IELTS academic The graph below guves information about the progress of certain diseases during childhood between 1950 and 2000 in developed country.

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