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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The given maps demonstrate the alterations in road access to a city hospital between 2007 and 2010. Overall, it can be seen that a noticeable change took place for car park areas and all roads were particularly developed. To begin with, a new public car park was built to the east of the ring road and entrance for this car park on the Ring Road. The old car park which could be used by staff and public in 2007 was converted to A staff car park. All of THE bus stops were removed and A new bus station was constructed to the west of the Hospital Road and 2 new roads were built to connect to the new bus station. Finally, Ring Road, Hospital Road and City Road remained nearly the same whereas 2 new roundaboutS were constructed, which can be used to access the new bus station. One of them was constructed between Ring Road and Hospital Road and the other roundabout was built on the connection point of City Road and Hospital Road.
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access to a city
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hospital
between 2007 and 2010.
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, it can be
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seen
that a noticeable
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change
took place for
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car
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park
areas and all
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roads
were
particularly
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public
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car
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park
was built
to the east of the
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ring
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road
and entrance for this
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car
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park
on the
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Ring
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Road
. The
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old
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car
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park
which could be
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used
by staff and public in 2007
was converted
to A staff
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car
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park
.
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bus
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stops
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and A
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new
bus station
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to the west of the
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Hospital
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Road
and 2
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new
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roads
were built
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bus station.

Finally
,
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Ring
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Road
,
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Hospital
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Road
and City
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Road
remained
nearly
the same whereas 2
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new
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roundaboutS
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bus station. One of them
was constructed
between
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Ring
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Road
and
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Hospital
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Road
and the other roundabout
was built
on the connection point of City
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Road
and
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Hospital
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Road
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IELTS academic The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

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6.0
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