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the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010 KpEN
The two maps describe the changes that took place at a city hospital from 2007 to 2010. Overall, there have  been great changes in the way to get to a city hospital of  two different years. However, there were features that haven't been changed. The city hospital is located  between two roads, Ring and City road. And there is  the Hospital road between City road and hospital.    This road had 6 bus stops, 3 of them was on the  right and the others were on the left. Also there was car park, which was not only for the staff, but for everyone. Bus stops were replaced with the bus station, that was in the west of hospital road and the car park was divided 3 years later. In 2010 there were two car parks public and for the staff. The Public car park was in the east of the hospital, the other park  car was instead of the old car park. In 2007 there were no roundabouts, but in 2010  to facilitate the movement of cars and buses the were built roundabouts. The roundabouts were located in the start and the end poits of hospital road.
The two maps
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changes
that took place at a city
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hospital
from 2007 to 2010.

Overall
, there have
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been great
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changes
in the way to
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get
to a city
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hospital
of
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two
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different
years.
However
, there were features that haven't been
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changed
.

The city
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hospital
is located
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between two
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roads
, Ring and City
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road
. And there is
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the
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Hospital
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road
between City
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road
and
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hospital
.
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This
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road
had 6
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bus
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stops
, 3 of them was on the
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right and the others were on the
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Also
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car
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, which was not
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only
for the staff,
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for everyone. Bus
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stops
were replaced
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hospital
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road
and the
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car
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park
was divided
3 years later. In 2010 there were two
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car
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public and for the staff. The Public
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park
was in the east of the
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, the other park
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was
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old
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. In 2007 there were no roundabouts,
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in 2010
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to facilitate the movement of
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cars
and buses the
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roundabouts. The roundabouts
were located
in the
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start
and the
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poits
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IELTS academic the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

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