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the charts below show the percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

the charts below show the percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. NYEy
Given are charts illustrating the popularity of foreign languages in addition to English among British university students in 2000 and 2010. It is evident from the information supplied that the proportion of students who were inclined to speak foreign languages had increased in the given yeras. Moreover, the percentage of students who were able to speak french declined, while other languages and Spanish rose. As shown by the figure, the percentage of students who did not speak foreign languages halved from 2000 to 2010. At the same time, the rate of French-speaking only went off by 5%, whereas German-speaking was the same in both years at 10%. In contrast, the popularity of Spanish-speaking increased among students from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010. Also noteworthy is the fact that the percentage of students who enjoyed another language and two other languages climbed from 15% to 20%, and from 10% to 15%, respectively.
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in 2000 and 2010.

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students
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who
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to speak foreign
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languages
had increased in the
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, the percentage of
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students
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were able to speak
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declined, while other
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languages
and Spanish rose.

As shown by the figure, the percentage of
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students
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who
did not speak foreign
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languages
halved from 2000 to 2010. At the same time, the rate of French-speaking
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went off by 5%, whereas German-speaking was the same in both years at 10%.

In contrast
, the popularity of Spanish-speaking increased among
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students
from 30% in 2000 to 35% in 2010.
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Also
noteworthy is the fact that the percentage of
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students
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who
enjoyed another
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language
and two other
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climbed from 15% to 20%, and from 10% to 15%,
respectively
.
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IELTS academic the charts below show the percentage of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

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