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The two given pie charts describe the distribution of employees and self-employed of 2 genders in manual job and non-manual job in Great Britain in 1992

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The two given pie charts describe the distribution of employees and self-employed of 2 genders in manual job and non-manual job in Great Britain in 1992. Looking at the pie chart, it can be seen clearly that females mostly worked in clerical or related, managerial and professional and other manual jobs. Managerial and professional, other manual and craft or similar jobs were fields that male labor was interested in. About female employment pattern, 31% women had a job in clerical or related, this figure was the highest percentage in occupation. Managerial and professional and other manual accounted for 29% and 27% in total jobs respectively which are over double than the combination of craft or similar and general labourers. About male employment pattern, managerial and professional made up the highest proportion in total jobs at 36%, which was 10% higher than in other manual and 12% higher than in craft or similar field. The percentage of men working in clerical or related and other non-manual only accounted for 6% but this number was 3 times higher than general labourers.
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the distribution of employees and self-employed of 2 genders in manual
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and non-manual
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in Great Britain in 1992.

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managerial
and
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professional
and
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other
manual
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jobs
.
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Managerial
and
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professional
,
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other
manual and craft or similar
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jobs
were fields that male labor
was interested
in.

About female employment pattern, 31% women had a
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job
in clerical or related, this figure was the highest percentage in occupation.
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Managerial
and
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professional
and
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other
manual accounted for 29% and 27% in total
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jobs
respectively
which are over double than the combination of craft or similar and general
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labourers
.

About male employment pattern,
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managerial
and
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professional
made up the highest proportion in total
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jobs
at 36%, which was 10% higher than in
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other
manual and 12% higher than in craft or similar field. The percentage of
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men
working in clerical or related and
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non-manual
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accounted for 6%
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this number was 3 times higher than general
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IELTS academic The two given pie charts describe the distribution of employees and self-employed of 2 genders in manual job and non-manual job in Great Britain in 1992

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